Friday, June 5, 2009

Introduction to Revision

For my revision piece I chose my second paper about community. Although I did a fair job on this, I had a hard time developing a strong thesis and word choice that made sense.
As I revised It I feel like I did a better job selecting new words and adding to my thesis to make it flow and make sense with the next paragraph.

I chose to revise the first two paragraphs.

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